(Christian's newest beginning of a story....)
Sniffing the air, I slowly took a step forward. I could almost feel the animal in my hands. If I was right, she was just around the tree to my left.
I pulled out my bow as I took another step forward. Now I could nearly smell her, as if she was right in front of me. For all I knew, she could have been. I had my eyes closed. I opened them and pushed my back against the tree. Just as I was about to turn and shoot, I reconsidered my approach. As I slung my bow back over my shoulder, I pulled out my knife.
My body tensed up. If I made even the smallest mistake, it could not only mean my death but the people behind me, too. And if we died, a whole lot of people would as well.
My buddy gave me the 'okay' signal and I shot to the side, lodging my knife on the back end of the tree. But nothing was there. It was just me. I could have sworn she would have been there.
Just as I was about to yell at my friend, I felt a foot dig into my back. I flew forward and hit the bush in front of me.
I stood up and faced my attacker. It was her! She smiled. At least I thought she did. It was a mix of a scold and anger. All together it strangely looked like a smile.
"You've got to be faster than that!" she taunted. I charged. But she disappeared. She literally vanished. Now I was angry!
"Get her! Search every part of this cursed forest!" I screamed at my team. I watched as they scrambled over each other, looking everywhere. I was furious! How could the same stupid girl get away from the most skilled team in all of Alduraq?
I grabbed the end of my knife and tried to pull it out of the tree. I must have really tried to hurt her because I couldn't get it out. I spun the handle to make a bigger hole, until finally I got it out.
Now I was not going to let her get away.
5 comments:
WOW!! (I would make that bold and 50 pt. font if I could.) That is AMAZING!!!! Impressive, Christian!
Good stuff...I have all kinds of questions about where this story is going: who is the girl and why are they hunting her? How can she vanish? Who are the hunters and why would their death mean the deaths of so many others?
I concur...I need some more information! What a good writer you've got on your hands!
Impressive... someday I can say "that author rode in my carpool and even slept at my cabin!"
Amazing start to a story or is it a novel. Let me know when it's finished. Love, Grandma
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